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KILL ME!!! - *JunAkera's FanFiction "YARME" [You are my Enemy - for eternity] (gets translated by herself)

an Ash/Gary/Misty-story

roles:
Misty as a vampire hunter
Gary as Misty's very best friend and saver
Ash as Satoshi, the noble vampire

!!!
[SPOILER]
Gary: "No..." *is still looking to "Satoshi" (Ash) and Misty* *slowly Misty pulls herself together* *looks to Gary indeed, but can't identify him yet* *Gary only looks totally shocked to her, even more to "Satoshi"* "How can you dare it..."
"Satoshi"(Ash): *gazes to Gary very angry* "Again you? Wasn't it all enough? Shall I brake you every bones this time, you finally figure it out?!"
Gary: *is not daunted somewhat* "What have you done to her, you bastard?! You really haven't bi..." *watches Misty when she touches her neck carefully* *the blood is still fresh* "... b... bite her..."
"Satoshi"(Ash): "And what about now, uh? She wanted it. She belongs to me! She WANTS to be with me! She..."
Misty: "Satoshi, please! Stop it!" *immediately he hushs and snuggles her closer to him* *after a little while Misty looks to Gary apologetic* "I'm so sorry, Gary. - I... I should have told you more earlier. I have chosen."
Gary: *doesn't feel his legs anymore* *buckles easy and falls on his knees, relies on his hands*
Misty: "G-Gary...?" *stands up groggy* *makes a few steps up to him*
Gary: "Kill me..."
Misty: *pauses abruptly* *freezes* "... What?!"
Gary: "I can't stand this anymore! How can you go with him?! Don't you think, I'm blind? As if I haven't recognized, you depart from me more and more every day, don't look at me anymore, not accepting me! Where is my best friend gone? --- WHERE?!"
Misty: "Gary, what are you talking about? – I'm still myself. – Only changed..."
Gary: "Dammit, you are a vampire-hunter! Why do you do something to us, the city? Why do you betrayed us?!" *looks to her with a gazey face, anger, sorrow and simply said horrable one* "I can't live like this anymore! Not without you!! You've betrayed us - me! Don't I mean anything to you?!" *recognizes, Misty can't reply anything and tumbles back* "You have the power, even more now, since you've become one of them! – Kill me, in a moment, here!" *Misty moves no plot* "PLEASE!!!" *Gary breaks down totally*
Misty: *can't hold off her tears anymore, but can control herself* *pulls herself together and walks to Gary* *she falls on her knees in front of him and hugs him* *she does nothing, only hold him and snuggles him close to her, so Gary stops breathing for a second and stares down shocked* "No matter what I choose. You will be my very best friend ever and my all beloved "big brother", Gary. Promise me – we will be together forever, no matter what happens." *Gary doesn't reply* "I can't kill you. I would kill myself. You are a big part of my life and my second me. I will never do no such thing." *snuggles him more closer to her* *a tear falls down on his cheek as her's softly touches his* "We will be together forever. You are the most important person to me, and I'll never let you down."
Gary: *rests still frozen* *tears come back into his eyes* *hides his face into her shoulder and snuggles Misty back strangely, hugs her desperately* *cries till he has no more tear anymore*
...
[SPOILER] END
!!!

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That's the way I think the end of this FanFiction can happen. I really love *JunAkera's :iconjunakera: FanFiction YARME. She is awesome! And I hope she will get it to translate it completely in English. The prologue is done, she said.

I hope you like it :3 *sweet look*

Yours
Miya :iconmiyatoriaka:
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ASH/SATOSHI/SACHA, MISTY/KASUMI/ONDINE AND GARY/SHIGERU BELONG TO (c) SATOSHI TAJIRI; POKÉMON NINTENDO; GAME FREAK
YARME belongs to (c) *JunAkera also the outfits/charadesigns of "Satoshi" and Misty
FanArt belongs to (c) *MiyaToriaka, February/April 2009

Critiques


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The poses are nice, not the typical poses that you see everyday. However the colouring could use a lot of work, you don't have any constrasting colours to make the shadows darker, giving better shape to things like the fisted hand. If you want to make a sad/dark atmosphere, use dark, dark blues for dark areas, shadows, etc. It creates a lot of depth on your subjects too - since they look flat. Blues could have been used in their shadows on their orange-y skin tones. It would help reflect on the background too which is dark dark blues and whatnot. Originality of the subjects lacks though, heavily, since vampires are WAY overused and boring. :roll: Where is vampire Pikachu now? :XD: Other than that...keep on TRUCKIN'. =P
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Pros: The emotions and effects in this picture are amazing. Very touching and so powerful. You matched the diolague with the picture perfectly. Although the colors are dark, you can still see every single emotion on each character. Vampires can open up alot of great pictures, and this is one of them. It blew my mind when I saw it. You cant get any better than that.

Cons: Gary's (bottom right picture) outline can be seen more than Ash's or Misty's. But that isnt a con really. I cant really say anything bad about this picture. Its so perfect. All I can say is just wow.
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:iconbeeju:
WOW! This is amazing. I love it! You do so well with making the classic Pokemon characters.

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Das sieht wirklich sehr schön aus und es steckt vor allen Dingen voller Gefühl und Emotionen.
Ich finde es immer gaz interessant wenn man Bilder macht,die auf Fanfics basieren.Das kommt immer ein bisschen einer Verfilmung gleich.
Hey und jetzt fällt mir erst auf,dass es an meinem Geburtstag gezeichnet wurde.^^

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Very cute, adorable but sad :(

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oh wow that looks so amazing great work!

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Very original, I look forward to seeing the story this is based off of. Good work with the dialogue, it really sets the scene for this picture. You can really see the emotion here in the picture- and I have to say that the fanged Misty looks cute, lol. Great work as always!

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YAY stimmt :D Du hattest da ja Geburtstag. Nya, vielleicht bist du ja mein Glücksbringer :aww:
Ja ich mag sowas auch sehr gerne. WENN ich denn mal ne FF lese ^^; zu meinen eigenen FanFics weiß ich eben, wie ich was machen muss, damit's wirklich so aussieht, wie ichs möchte.
Vielen lieben Dank :hug:

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Actually.... I took over translating it from Jenny, since I had to re-translate the prologue xD

I won't write you a comment, since you requested a critique :heart:

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